Welcome to Poetry Friday. Thanks to Sarah Grace at Sarah Grace Tuttle is sharing her process with metered verse. Can't wait to read more closely.
Poetry Challenge: The Inklings are serving up: Wordy 30 is a poem using exactly 30 letters. Each line should have the same number of letters. Each line should use one word. You might have 6 lines with 5 letters in each line (like Wordle), or 5 x 6, 3 x 10, 10 x 3, 15 x 2, 2 x 15, 30 x 1, or (most unlikely) 1 x 30.
I am taking a class with the fabulous Georgia Heard and Rebecca Kai Doltich. What I love about them is the talking about poems and poets plus honoring our work. And with honoring the work are nudges and wonderings to enhance revision.
Last week, I had the about actually happen. We keep our back door to the deck ope a lot so our dog, has access to the deck. And we have had numerous finches, sparrows, and juncos fly in. (Admitly, it creeps me out as there's an old wives' tale about birds entering house). Last week it was a hummingbird. It was a moment of wonder.
In class, we talked about how this poem was akin to a little play and how to create more drama by cutting words. Today while revising, it occurred to me that there was a better title from some words I cut. I only had titled is "Hummingbird" because I couldn't think of anything else, until today, "Autumn Afternoon".
Book News: What Is A Friend? Edited by Sylvia Vardell and Janet Wong
It's here! What is A Friend?, edited by Sylvia Vardell and Janet Wong. The poets in this book submitted poems for consideration. It's a great example of ekphrastic poetry while considering what makes a friend or friendship.
It is a Children's Book Council "Hot Off the Press" Selection for October.
100% of the profits will be donated to the IBBY Children in Crisis Fund (IBBY.org).
I had fun with this poem. I knew nothing about skateboarding. (Riding a bicycle was difficult enough). The terms came from researching and followed by checking with former students for accuracy.
Bonus: I have a great nephew who's name is "Ollie."
10/7/2022 12:02:57 am
Jone, thank you for all the treats in your post! I love seeing your revision process! I like your new title and I love your poem! You hooked me with "red apple peel." I love the voice in the poem and how it shows more intimacy "You're going to be okay, now a mantra." I also love how you show emotion and concern for the hummer in your mantra and questions. Some of my favorite lines are "the air hushes," "feet curl on thread loops," "gorget or red feathers, glistening," and I especially love your last stanza "it buzzes up, dive bombs" "saying thanks." What a wonderful experience, Jone, your care shines in your poem. I'm excited for you taking a workshop with Rebecca & Georgia! In May, I took a workshop at Highlights with them and three of the poets in your class. Thank you for explaining the Inklings 30 Wordy Challenge, which is new to me. I love your Ollie poem! It's tight, has great rhythm, rhymes, and ollie is a new voacab
10/7/2022 12:12:15 am
Oops! My above comment somehow printed before I could correct vocabulary word. Great research! I also wanted to say, my poem in What Is a Friend? has the pic of the girl with the puppy. I am proud of it and excited to read all the poems! I enjoyed this project. Thank you for all of your inspiration!
Janet Clare F.
10/7/2022 05:48:05 am
I am so sorry I could not take the class. I LOVE your revisions and your sharing them. So important to make it tighter. I need a bunch of time in between ....well much of the time....to do that. I like you speaking directly to the bird now. And Ollie. Terrific. You are braver than I but thanks for giving me some encouragement by sharing the process. Which I do use, but maybe with less confidence. Off to writing. My copy of Friend arrives later on. So excited for this one. Congratulations. And Poetry Rocks. Terrific addition. Your (our) brand!!!
10/7/2022 06:13:46 am
Love seeing the revisions, Jone! You really tightened up your poem.
10/7/2022 11:11:05 am
Nice, Joan, and I always marvel on how much cutting brings out the emotion in a poem. I once had a bird that looked dead in my basement come to live when we took it outdoors. Enjoy the class. I'm taking the class at the end of November and am looking forward to it.
10/7/2022 12:16:44 pm
Jone, I love seeing your revision! The transformation in the first two lines is my favorite-- you tightened the language to create a stronger image. Thank you so much for showing that process! And, congrats on having your poem in What is a Friend! It's so much fun to see so many folks celebrating that book today.
10/7/2022 04:26:13 pm
Fun to compare the two versions and see just why you didn't really need the rest. Very nicely tightened up! Loved "Ollie", too, and that you did your research!
10/8/2022 03:25:24 am
How wonderful to be taking a class and revising in such a fun way. I'm a bit jealous...but my plate is overflowing here. Someday...someday. And, hooray for Hot off the Press -- What is a Friend? That's great news. You go, girl! Keep those publishing credits rolling in.
10/10/2022 07:39:14 am
I do love a process post! As in this example, I often need to cut (chop/slash) words and lines to make my poems sing. Well done! And congrats on your skateboard poem!
10/10/2022 08:46:10 am
Congratulations, Jone, for the publication of your wonderful poem in Janet and Sylvia's anthology.
10/10/2022 03:12:54 pm
Finally getting to the PF posts - and am so delighted that you shared your revision process from our workshop drafts! I love the instructiveness that I'm gleaning from your two drafts -- spot on suggestions because the intimacy definitely comes through with the POV change. The workshop has gifted me with time to linger and sit with poems. And then, to see that you, too, are in WHAT IS A FRIEND? (Mine is "Imagine")... I'm late to the book birthday celebrations - but hoping to help boost this coming week! See you Wed!
10/11/2022 04:35:00 am
Late getting through this week--I LOVE getting to see the process of revision you enjoyed through the course you're in. What a great moment to write about! The mantra, being practiced at swaddling, the red of the apple peel and the gorget...lovely. I only missed the soft brown branch of the towel in the 2nd version; that was lovely too.
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